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poem -- "Oh, how beautiful!"


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Oh, How Beautiful!

White fluff
like windblown candy
perches tenuously on dark branches,
assiduously blessing the earth.

Never mind the scent of aged piss.

Moving carefully,
gentle on hollow hips and fragile thighs,
she's absorbed in protecting her glorious clothing
and her elegant golden skin.

Never mind her fried and starving insides.

                                      ©Belenen03.26.03

I wrote this more than three years ago and I still reeeeally like it.

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Comments
thiswaste ══╣╠══
I really like this too! Well done.
belenen ══╣analytical╠══
thanks!
gods_ornament ══╣╠══
juansrx ══╣DDR1╠══
she CAN do it...I DON´T!!
belenen ══╣analytical╠══
I used to write them all the time, but stopped sometime last year and haven't written any since... I should try my hand at it again.
gods_ornament ══╣╠══
misemifein2 ══╣╠══
I like the second half definitely because I get the image from it, but I don't understand the first half. Not to say I don't like that too. But then it would be that it looks like a good poem, so I like how it looks and the words and the structure, but I need to understand it, because then I can say I like it without feeling terribly superficial! Though I feel a bit stupid being the only one having to ask for it to be explained. That is because I'm a simple soul, and don't understand things unless they are spelt out, so it isn't a critisicm at all!

All the things you have written that I have read have seemed so good, think you would make a brilliant writer. I really mean that. There is something in you that brings out the honesty in me. It's a very strange feeling. Being entirely honest feels like a wobbly tooth that I think I shouldn't poke but somehow I can't stop doing it. I have reactionary urges to tell really big lies sometimes to make up for it.

Sorry, I'm rambling. I'm going to go and look up assiduously in the dictionary now, (word-collecting).

P.S. Post more often! I want to get in maximum Belenen before I go back to Glasgow.
belenen ══╣inspired╠══
oh don't worry, no one and I mean NO ONE, has gotten this poem. I would have posted an explanation, but I was hoping someone might get it... ah well. The first stanza is talking about an ornamental pear tree, which has gorgeous fluffy white blossoms, but smells like urine. I was comparing that to a supermodel, who looks all pristine and 'pretty' but is dying inside.

and thank you SO MUCH for saying that about me being a good writer, I am so very flattered! ♥ and OMG, the best compliment in the universe, saying that I provoke honesty in you. and then wanting more Belenen posts!!!!!!! *giggles* you make me so happy!!! I'm so glad to have you online for a bit, I miss you so much when you're gone! *lovelovelove* Maybe I can email you my posts and you can email me about your life when you don't have home internet. :-( We need to keep in touch better.
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